Chapter 24 is posted

This chapter took me a little longer to write than the others. It was difficult to capture Anita's feelings and describe why she felt that way. Additionally, I wrote quite a bit of Chapter 24 and for some reason I decided to reread Chapter 22. Good thing I did because I wrote several inconsistencies between the two chapters. It is my position that I fixed all the issue in Chapter 24 and I am sticking to it. Until, of course, one of you points something out. Then I'll back pedal like a cornerback covering a deep route with no safety support. (Oops, I read a tutorial on writing that said I shouldn't use analogies that are out of context. Oh well, I think we can all handle a little football.) The second reason it was difficult was writing the interaction between Ass and Ben. I would especially like feedback on this relationship. I have no idea how accurate or how believable the story line is. Overall, it is definitely a plausible idea and I am sure that similar relationships have occurred in the past and will again in the future. I am just curious as to whether you think I captured it well. Be kind in the criticism, Ben is my first gay male character. Technorati Tags: Fiction, Online Book, Chapter, Rebeleyeball, Paul Gavin IceRocket Tags: Fiction, Blook, Chapter, Rebeleyeball Copyright (c) 2006 Paul Gavin. All rights reserved.